Matt Bellamy

I really liked this. For one thing, I have just read two poems which had no capital letters, rhyming or punctuation. And I'm not complaining about that at all, but ...

simple lists made on the back of complex black and white medical mixtures of letters just outline the date in bold, livid marker. the weak, spindly second hand of the ...

I'm always unsure whether or not to say anything when no commas or capital letters are used because different poets seem to do it differently. So I've taken your poem ...

This chapter is better, things are starting to come together now. I've made a few tweaks, and some general comments.

Critique of the first chapter for you, I hope it helps. Happy editing!

Here you go, one story critique for you, hope it helps.

Ooh, awards! That would be awesome :)

And chapter four.

Chapter three.

And another...only being able to add one attachment to each post is a pain :P

I've just finished reading your story, so, here ya go :) I look forward to reading more of this.

Big Brother...friend... *touches* Friiiieeennnd.

I think I covered all my bases sufficiently here. All your base are belong to us. I'm sorry, I just couldn't resist. Glad I made it onto a few lists ...

Why are there two of this topic? One in the Lounge, and one in Randomness? :s

This started off as a very short story back on TYWC, and I have had it for a long time. It's rather undeveloped and needs a lot of work (it's ...